One.
She sits still, not moving,
Just trying to breathe.
Rocking backward and forward,
Inside that cold, damp rain.
Just trying to breathe.
Rocking backward and forward,
Inside that cold, damp rain.
As suddenly as a shadow,
Things fall back in queue.
Everything seems sunny –
but still slightly askew.
Things fall back in queue.
Everything seems sunny –
but still slightly askew.
Three, two, one,
One moment has past.
Clouds cover the sky, she forgets,
The storm is forever forecast.
One moment has past.
Clouds cover the sky, she forgets,
The storm is forever forecast.
-Sary
it has a nice rhythm to it. not bad at all. quick typo, though, easily overlooked- 'breath' in the second line should be 'breathe.' i make that mistake so much i'm practically hard-wired to look out for it now. XD interesting imagery- 'cold damp rain' and then, 'everything seems sunny, but slightly askew.' :) like it.
ReplyDeleteThanks! And thanks for the correction, I never would have picked it up otherwise. :3
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